One cold, dark night Holly awoke with a fright.Somethink had awoken her.What was it.She heard a strange noise.She fellt a strang shiver up her spine.Holly jumped out of bed,and ran over to her dresingtable.she slided over to her light swich to try to ter it on.BUT.but it was melted.what?Holly thought.Bang,bang somethink was coming up the coridoor.Holly was skeird.Holly started baking off.The door started oping slowly.A big shaddow appired on the floor.Now Holly was realy skared.Realy skered.Acherly TERAFIED.It started coming closer.And closer and closer.Holly was extremly terified.Then she awoke.
Chloe Brier’s 100 word challenge…
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Oh Chloe, I’m terrified too! You have created lots of suspense within your story and it makes it very exciting (and scary!) to read. My wish for next time is that you use more punctuation appropriate to your story such as exclamation marks (!) or ellipsis (…). Well done.
I really enjoyed the suspense you created, through the short sentences. Next time try to proof read your writing . 🙂
wow chloe i really like the suspence you created love your story<3
love your story chloe
xx
That was brillant chloe
I really think you are a star Chloe and well done:}
remember where to put your capitle letters
i thought that was very good well done
I rellay like how you did the dream part
Thanks chloe for making the story about me
I enjoyed your story.
i think it is amazing.
i enjoyed your story so much
really well done