You have thought carefully about the journey you would make if you were a beam of light. I also like how you have used personification to make the brain sound like a person who makes a decision – very clever!
My wish is that you could also include the lens in your story and how it focuses the light onto the retina.
What a fab, believable journey Emily. I like how you started right from the light source.
To improve, next time remember to read through your work. Well done 🙂
You have thought carefully about the journey you would make if you were a beam of light. I also like how you have used personification to make the brain sound like a person who makes a decision – very clever!
My wish is that you could also include the lens in your story and how it focuses the light onto the retina.
Well done Emily.
What a fab, believable journey Emily. I like how you started right from the light source.
To improve, next time remember to read through your work. Well done 🙂
🙂
fantastic